Peer Response: Paper 1
Two benefits of peer response: 1) you get feedback from a classmate on your paper before submitting it for a grade; 2) examining the strengths and weaknesses of someone else's writing can help you recognize strengths and weaknesses in your own.
How it works: You read your peer's draft critically, then respond with advice on how the paper might be improved. When you're finished, email your response to your classmate and "cc" it to email@example.com. Later, read your classmate's comments on your paper, and if you agree with the suggestions, revise your paper accordingly, addressing the problems and weaknesses noted by your peer.
Get mean: While you might comment on the paper's strengths, your primary concern is to focus on its weaknesses, particularly in the areas of structure, format, logic, and overall development of content. Be tactful and considerate in your comments, but critical all the samedo it nicely, but "let 'em have it." Praise and back-patting will not help your peer improve his or her paper.
Important: Indicate your name as the "Peer" and your peer's name as "Author." Your response should be approximately 1½-2 pages, at least.
Instructions: Read the entire paper and then answer the following questions in order—number your answers according to the question numbers: 1, 2, 3, etc. Your comments are not restricted to these questions alone, though: any and all advice you can offer that might help your classmate improve the paper is appropriate.
1. Evaluate the introduction, looking especially for places that are not neutral, or where the author appears to answer the question before raising it. Also consider whether the introduction is adequately developed. If the paragraph seems at all brief or hastyanything less than half a pagesuggest specific, concrete ways of setting up the topic more effectively or in greater depth. (Avoid saying simply "expand": suggest how the paragraph might be expanded.)
2. Evaluate the central question raised at the end of the introduction. (You should look at the paper assignment prompt to answer this question.) If the introduction does not end in a question, point this out to the author! Suggest how the central question might be sharpened or improved.
3. Does the topic sentence in each body paragraph answer the central question directly (using the very words from the question in each answer)? Note that topic sentences should be the first in each body paragraph. Suggest improvements in the topic sentences.
4. One by one, in separate paragraphs, evaluate the effectiveness of each body paragraph in elaborating either its central point. Number your points here ¶2, ¶3, ¶4, etc. Focus especially on how well and convincingly the points are developed. Be critical and suggest additional examples the author might use to expand any underdeveloped paragraphs, perhaps even quotations from appropriate readings.
5. Evaluate the conclusion, considering whether it leaves the reader impressed with the culmination of the writer's analysis, or does it just fizzle out? Is the thesis statement clear in the conclusion? Is the paragraph adequately developed (i.e. somewhere near half a page in length)? Make specific suggestions for improvements in any areas needed in the conclusion.
6. Evaluate the author's use of quotations: how effective are they? Are there enough to meet assignment requirements (i.e. three from our readings "Letting Go" and "Big Mother Is Watching," or three from "Obsessed with Sport" and "It Isn't Just a Game")? Can you point to other quotes from our readings that might help? Are they introduced (N3) and documented (Q1) correctly?
7. What is the most crucial thing your classmate should work on to improve the paper? Offer concrete suggestions for what he or she should do to revise the essay.
8. While you don't need to "mark" the paper or identify every single local problem you may notice in spelling, grammar, etc., do identify problems in grammar, diction, punctuation, etc. that seem especially persistent or significant, paying special attention to the golden rules, nuggets, "simple stuff," and "quotations" items.
1. Avoid contractions.
2. Never use "you" or "your."
3. Pronouns agree with antecedents"they," "their," and "them" are most problematic.
4. Avoid using "this," "that," "these," etc. as free-standing pronouns. Be sure the antecedent of "it" is clear.
5. Avoid sentence fragments.
6. Avoid fused sentences.
7. Avoid comma splices.
8. Parallelism, especially in lists or series.
9. Avoid successions of short, choppy sentences.
10. Avoid overly long, complex sentences.
1. Avoid plot summary.
2. Use the literary present tense.
3. Introduce quotes and incorporate them smoothly so that all references within the quotes are clear.
4. Ellipses are correct in placement, number of "dots," and spacing, and the two sides of the omission fit together grammatically.
5. Punctuation marks next to quote marks are placed correctly: small marks of punctuation inside quote marks, larger marks outside quote marks unless they are an integral part of what's quoted or indicated as a title.
6. Avoid ending paragraphs with quotations.
7. Indicate titles correctly with underlining or quotation marks: "small" works take quote marks, "larger" works take underlining.
8. Dashes and hyphens, if used, are typed and spaced correctly.
9. Spelling: especially the names of characters, authors, and titles.
10. Proofreading errors.